My House (Read This!!!) i Need feed back!?

by pinky7amc7 on 02.13.2010

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The large tower in the sky that stretches on and on till theres no light
its color is striking the color of lemons and a little trim of white
the door stands tall with sturdy pine to keep safe whats inside

My house is florescent with its many colors, and on the inside the carpet is brown, and within lies a bathroom thats blue like the sky
all these colors mix to make my house, my home
for even my room pink like bon-bons even seems to fit in with the house

My house is warm when it is freezing out, and my house is cool when the weather feels like you could cook an egg on your head, it always seeems to be the perfect temprature in my house, its my place of shelter, my place i sleep, when the howling cackle of a storm blows in

My house is sturdy and smells of my dog lucy, and laundry soap
it has pictures of figurines, of memories and special events

My house helps me define myself it lets me add a little bit of me to the walls, that stand there plain and tall, that hold me tight like a child hold her doll

My house is me, my house is my home,because now it is me
within every room on every wall you will know this is my home, and not just a house, standing there plain and tall!!!

3 responses

  1. TeenQueen96

    That was…beyond words! Well, there’s words but those aren’t good enough.

    • ~AlissonH.

      Nice. I wish I had a house like that. Mine’s allways cold, in winter AND summer, which is only convienent in summer.
      But I like your wording and spacing. Very cool! :)

      • 6twigirl6

        that was so stinking awesome!

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