by 
atllvr123
on 07.13.2010
I thought that you were
my friend
after ten years.
Why did you do this?
Why did you call me that?
I could ask.
but no,
I ask:
Why did you walk away?
I thought that I could trust you.
I told you every secret I had…
they weren’t supposed to go on facebook. really.
Why did you betray me?
Why did you tell them that?
I could ask.
but no,
I ask:
Why did you walk away?
Did this really happen? Like did your friend really put something up mean on facebook
hehehe umm… poetic license?? idk… no, i guess it didn’t really happen to me. It happens to lots of other people though….
Aww…. yes, I understand
all my friends let me down.
I thought the line “I told you every secret I had…they weren’t supposed to go on Facebook. Really.” was very creative. But I feel like the rest of the poem was rather lacking. I’m not trying to be offensive or anything it’s just that I think if you’re going to use repetition, you might want to consider lengthening the poem, or else it’s basically just the same thing over and over again. Add more of those creative lines like the Facebook one and this thing will be genius!
jessicahuey: I’m sorry! I’m sure that if you talk to your friends and tell them how you feel, they will try to change. If not, I’m sure that there are lots of people who would be better friends than that. Ink_splat: thanks for your advice!!
P.S. I have a new version now- hope you like it:)
yeah, i know! i can’t really be myself in front of my friends. :( and they all wouldn’t like me for me…….. but great poem! ☺
Aww that’s too bad bikerqueen! Maybe you can be yourself with one of your friends at first, and then move on to your other friends. I hope it works out! and thanks
aw, jess don’t sound so sad, I’m sure that’s not true. if it is i kinda know how u feel. i can’t b real with any body. if i was you’ld think i’m insane. no exageration what so ever.
nice……………………..sad to kno that ur “secrets” were posted on fb!!! like the poem…i just read ur poem cause it was titled same as mine…haha!
Really cool, atllver!
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